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Loking for some feedback

Post by The Scream Man on Sun Feb 06, 2011 5:19 am

So Ive mentioned a few times that I'm an amateur filmmaker, working on some web series. My main ninja series is still in post, but I'm also working on another show. The first show i ever did was an improv detective comedy called "The Polcheck Chronicles." We work out a plot and then film it improv, so it's very silly.
Well, we've decided to reboot it, so this is a title sequence I've been working on. Its not finished, but I'm looking for opinions and thoughts so I can improve it. Smile

This is a test version of the opening titles for the new show. Still some missing spots, but I'm looking for a general impressions on the whole thing. Shots that work or don't, that sort of thing.



Thanks in advance for the feedback all. Seriously, positive or negative, anythings fine! Smile

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Re: Loking for some feedback

Post by BigJay on Sun Feb 06, 2011 5:39 am

Hey Craig,

I enjoyed watching the earlier polcheck stuff

The intro goes to long I would cut it back to 30 seconds .... those jump cuts where you have shot numbers look like they will work but its hard to tell till there in there .... For me Font Choice is a big deal and Im not sure if im feeling the font you are using and wether the the location: sydney time: now needs to be in there .......there is way to many city shots ..... the nicki stoupe shot needs to be steady'd its a way to wobbley and looks like its a reality tv shot the clip is dark but that could be youtube compression ... the music is great and I really love the New hat productions animation

Thats it .. the good the bad and the ugly

Cheers Jay

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Post by DroothR on Sun Feb 13, 2011 5:32 pm

I agree with everything Jay said, except for the Location/Time bit.

I'm not opposed to that at all. Smile

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Re: Loking for some feedback

Post by The Scream Man on Tue Feb 15, 2011 5:29 pm

thanx guys
i mae a lot of changes, but Ill keep it aside for the actual series now Smile

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